My creative juices, (6)
Are utterly useless, (6)
Dried up by a reader, (6)
Criticizing my meter. (7)
And yet I must say, (5)
If I had my way, (5)
I’d call it all bull, (5)
that each syllable. (5)
Should count up exactly, (6)
So matter of factly, (6)
Makes me uninventive, (6)
And anal retentive. (6)
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Especially glad you thought so, Joan!
Was meter maid … read the dials from right to left. First counter clockwise the clockwise and so on. Was fun mmm
Oh really? So funny! Don’t know if you know the song Lovely Rita Meter Maid by the Beatles. Is that you?
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I think you are an poetic autistic savant. I mean that in a good way of course!
Thanks for qualifying that, lest I might not be so sure! Just kidding! At this point I think I’m getting to know your sense of humor, thanks!
Nice!
Thanks for the feedback and the follow. I look forward to reading more from you.
Well you certainly pack a fine right hook young Marissa! Tales in verse is your chosen niche. You do it so well and let no other say any different!
Thanks! I’m actually very torn about this criticism so I appreciate your feedback!
Verse should bounce along (which of course you know) and yours bounces majestically!
Love it! I agree it is a tad anal retentive to stick to those rules, but I have found the brevity required and the limitations imposed have pushed me to consider alternate ways of expressing the same sentiment/meaning that then accidentally sound more poetic : )
Yes, I’ve kind of been working on a compromise where I’m adhering to those rules but not to the point where I feel I’m sacrificing too much of what I want in the poem and it’s not the worst thing in the world!
yeah, if you were sacrificing what you want in the poem, you’d have to ask yourself why you are writing in the first place.
Unrelated…sometimes it is easier just to hit “like” but I really enjoy reading you poems- they make me laugh- sometimes just an internal, silent laugh, but sometimes out loud too. With the time difference, it is often at 3am while up feeding baby that I am reading with half shut eyes : )
Thank you! That is so nice to know (that you are reading and enjoying that is, even if it is with half shut eyes!)
Now that you’ve got this one down, it’s time to move on to a sonnet. Or even better, a sestina.
Yes, let me just look up the requirements on that one and I’ll get back to you in the next million years or so. By the way, this is just one poem. I’ve far from ‘got it down’!!
Oh, you’ve got it down. I know poetry and you have mastered this one.
Uhm. I happen to thoroughly enjoy your creativity and style. It’s amazing. And always fresh. And it’s you. How can someone else tell you how to write as you? Silly criticizers….
Thank you and I would suppose you are right. However, the criticism didn’t come from just another reader. It was an editor (and let me stop there). But it makes me question my poetry if I move forward and try to get published.
That’s frustrating. To be enjoyed by so many but one person have more impact than all of the other readers.
I suppose. Today I went through a lot of the poetry I’ve written trying to edit without being too anal retentive about it and I think I’m starting to get the feel for it. It may be a good thing. I do appreciate your support.
YOU!!! Now why didn’t I think to advise you to do something like this??? Because only YOU could think of a brilliant handle for your situation like this witticism!
Thank you Stephanie! How’s that for taking life’s lemons and putting them in your bra, or something like that…
I was really getting into that and almost imagining the clapping when you wrote six, as if the crowd was sort of singing along with you. I could have done with a few more verses, because it seemed almost like a party to me, but then I do have quite an exciting and adventurous life
Thanks Peter. Well, you know, it;s funny because after receiving the criticism, I purposely went about writing that poem with the intention of writing something that did fit to a predictable meter. The fact that it was my first effort at doing such was the reason I kept the poem to 3 verses. Oh well, always leave them wanting more, right? Thanks for your comment!
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